I worte a song, what do you think about it? hey well i'm not a writer!?!
Question: i'm not a writter or something or my song is cool but hey atleast i tried so tell me what do you think about it?
if you think it sucks don't answer, if you think it's good or ok then please tell me how can i improve.
" alone in my life"
i'm alone in my room,
waithing fo the noon,
i don't get sleep,
my feeling are deep.
i need someone to love me,
i need some one to care about me,
i need someone who would dare to stand for me, oh yeah.
i'm a loner in my life,
i think that is fine,
i don't wanna fight,
i just want it right.
i need someone to love me,
i need someone to care about me,
i need someone who would dare to stand for me.
Answers: i'm not a writter or something or my song is cool but hey atleast i tried so tell me what do you think about it?
if you think it sucks don't answer, if you think it's good or ok then please tell me how can i improve.
" alone in my life"
i'm alone in my room,
waithing fo the noon,
i don't get sleep,
my feeling are deep.
i need someone to love me,
i need some one to care about me,
i need someone who would dare to stand for me, oh yeah.
i'm a loner in my life,
i think that is fine,
i don't wanna fight,
i just want it right.
i need someone to love me,
i need someone to care about me,
i need someone who would dare to stand for me.
*extremely eruptive applause*
BRAVO!!!!! take it to the recording studio i would pay for that song to be on the radio, WHOOOOOOOO-WHOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...
pretty cool man .. don't give up the day job
cool.. now sing it, record it and upload on youtube...
all the best
you must write based on your feeling. if you think that song is okay so i agree with you.but when the opinion comes from your sincere heart.
I'm not also a singer. Your song not bad.
Hit songs usually have a cleaner pattern to them. Most start with an introduction then have the chorus or subject of the piece. You could make the "I need someone..." parts be the subject. Then you need the answer. The short verses about being alone would work for that. Lastly you might want a bridge or something interesting that stands out. This is optional. Many songs finish with the repeated chorus.
Overall good lyrics, but a lot also depends on rhythm and notes. Some really good songs have shallow or tacky lyrics.
Good job so far
i love it!
i am THAT kind of person!.huhuhu...
im 'alone in my life'but still have Jesus.!
Hey it is really good.Who said it sucks.You said you are a beginner.So it is really cool.No one becomes a pro on his first step.Coming to your poem it lacks a bit of rhyming words at the end.If you can improve on that point you can do much better next time.But the best part is you put down your heart felt feeling.That's what really matters.Go ahead.All the best.
its actually pretty good, but express more feelings, and make it longer, you can write a few full songs in a day..its easier to sing it first and then write it down and try to remember wat you sang so take it slow
xD
'ps. maybe i should post my lyrics and see wat people think of them
i think if you're asking for opinions you should accept the fact that some people aren't gonna like it. if you just get people who think it's a great song to answer you won't be able to really grow and find ways to make it so that more people like it.
That said,it's pretty alright.i'd love to hear how it sounds with some music to it.