I'd like your thoughts on my newest song.?!
Question: The Flame
v1
Born in Dallas, born to live on the run.
Born a Christian, born a Yankee's son.
Born a sinner, yet innocent and free.
Born a thinker, born to dream.
v2
Found a pen and paper, found a guitar
Found a way to be heard, found a run-down bar
Found a lover, found an enemy
Found a jaded woman, found jealousy
(Chorus)
Now I know why they call this place The Flame
It'll set fire to your heart, like love was just a game
It'll hold you when you're up, leave you when you fall
But The Flame burns forever, you're just another picture on the wall.
v3
Maybe tonight, I'll have a little too much to drink.
Maybe tonight, I'll tell her what I think.
Maybe tonight, she'll say she's in love with him again
Maybe tonight, all I'll really need's a friend
v4
Down one last shot, down the road I head
Down to 3 bucks, down to 2 cigarettes
Down to the water, down to my knees
Damn the quarter-moon, damn this life I lead
(Repeat chorus)
Answers: The Flame
v1
Born in Dallas, born to live on the run.
Born a Christian, born a Yankee's son.
Born a sinner, yet innocent and free.
Born a thinker, born to dream.
v2
Found a pen and paper, found a guitar
Found a way to be heard, found a run-down bar
Found a lover, found an enemy
Found a jaded woman, found jealousy
(Chorus)
Now I know why they call this place The Flame
It'll set fire to your heart, like love was just a game
It'll hold you when you're up, leave you when you fall
But The Flame burns forever, you're just another picture on the wall.
v3
Maybe tonight, I'll have a little too much to drink.
Maybe tonight, I'll tell her what I think.
Maybe tonight, she'll say she's in love with him again
Maybe tonight, all I'll really need's a friend
v4
Down one last shot, down the road I head
Down to 3 bucks, down to 2 cigarettes
Down to the water, down to my knees
Damn the quarter-moon, damn this life I lead
(Repeat chorus)
Great. Lyrics are solid, some lines can be shortened, but it's great.
You probably hear this a lot and don't believe me, but I usually criticize harshly on others' lyrics =)
cool. :-)
I like it :) :)
impressive
i'd like to hear the music