A little rap i made?!


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A little rap i made?


i'm starting to like rapping a little more

im going through alot of rage at such a young age
readin the bible for guidance just page after page im going through a terrible stage
i sit and i pray for a better day but it all just seems grey
wasted all my pay to fill my ashtray
im frustrated all these rappers is outdated
naw i aint late i know they like to hate
im not gunna change the range is just lame
who is to blame for the death of this game?
we all aim for the same frame
we all claim we not having shame
theirs no reason i rap just ease the pain that came with the name
i love hip hop and im not gunna stop til i drop
call me prisoner for counting bars but atleast im not rapping about cash and cars

tell me where i need to improve and be honset

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10 hours ago
i think ithug is coming back after he calm down a little


Answers: 10 hours ago
i think ithug is coming back after he calm down a little honestly not too bad..rhymes were simple, not exactly "advanced" in rhyming, but not bad...no real wordplay or multies, no real metaphors, and while this all sounds bad, your rap really is okay for Yahoo Answers.... Source(s):
since spit squadron's low on crew right now (Ithug left!!)--dayum!! we could probably put you in... nice.. yo u gonna help the messgae i sent u I agree with Evil Conscience, but I liked it. As far as lyrics. But yeah like what conscience said no word play or none of that. U should join one of the Freestyle teams. improvement in word play its good. simple but flows right. and good to listen to. that's really good! i wish i could do rap like that.
try not to use to many of one rhyme tho...
like game, frame, shame name....try to find words that are a little more different. Otherwise its really damn good...It shows emotion and expression and thats what rap is all about.

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