What do you think of this short song?!

What do you think of this short song?

You cut the act just when I get close
C7G
You break my heart every time you go
CG
Be yourself when I admit
CG
I've done wrong, so goodnight

C7G
Hate to break it to you
C7G
when we are together, alone
CG
I want to be yours, *but I don't know who you are*
CG
Just to see you smile, makes my night

D C G x2

C DE
And I don't care what they say
BA G
I'll take your hand any day
C DE
I'll be true to follow you
BA G
and burry your worries away

C7G
I put all my love in this letter
C7G
If only I could find the words, *I would give them to you*
CG
I hope you take them for now
CG
So of all days did you really expect tonight

D C G
I'll leave my heart with you
D C G
It's as close as I will ever get
D C G
Your eyes hold all the answers
D C G
Your blank gasp will never leave my memory


C DE
And I don't care what they say
chorous again

I think you would have more effect on the chords than the lyrics.

A good example when Elton John sung the song "Daniel", I often wondered what he was thinking when he sang that song.

So I played your song on my guitar and I am waondering what you were thinking about when you wrote this song.

Your song has been reviewed by Al Rozz with over 5,000 songs reviewed on Garageband.

I find your lyrics can use more Hook in the chorus.
Your intro and outro should be relevant of the same.

The break in your song...well...there was none and that is no good.

You probably could put one where your D C Gx2 notes are, but it is too close to the intro so it wont work.