Look at these lyrics?? I made them and i need opinions....?!

Look at these lyrics?? I made them and i need opinions....?

I’m looking out for a new catastrophe
Can’t help but think that way when you look at me
It isn’t as though I don’t really feel the same
And it’s a complicated thing to explain

But even when I feel as though I’m falling
You seem as if you’re always there to catch me
And I know that feeling deep inside me
That it’s just another crazy fantasy

And though I’m, so different
Nothing can be overlooked past me
And I may, be insane
But I know that this feeling only calls for

Chorus:

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Look at me, I’m unsure of you
Can’t help it much, my guard is up and yours is too
Help me out, I don’t know what I’m after
But I can tell~~ that this is just a recipe~~
For disaster~~~~

I call your name out in the dark of night
You say calm down and then you go and hold me tight
I’m confused and what else can I do for now?
I’m glad you’re there to make everything all right

And there I go dreaming all these senseless dreams
Of you and me and all the things in between
Do you think there is anyway that I’ll be cured?
or should I shout until all my words are heard?

And though I’m, so different
Nothing can be overlooked past me
And I may, be insane
But I know that this feeling only calls for

Chorus
(repeat chorus 2x)

1 week ago
i just need some points in the right direction....nothing too mean or critical but some advice and opinion ok? Thanks!

I really like your lyrics! The only line that I hesitated at is "Nothing can be overlooked past me"-- I guess the grammatic structure of that line doesn't really make sense or convey a true meaning to me. Other than that I think you've shown you have a lot of talent!

The only other advice I would give you, as a songwriter myself, is to protect the talent you've been given! If you don't have a registered copyright on your work, I would be very careful about where you post it. You can find out how to obtain a copyright at the link I've included below. If a true copyright isn't an option at this time at the very least you should do something called the "poor man's copyright" on this and all your future works. Basically you mail yourself a copy of your work and then keep the envelope (unopened). The thought is that if you ever needed to, you could prove the work was yours as of the postmark date, and the envelope contents would confirm that. It's not really the preferred method, but at least it's something!

Thanks for sharing and good luck!