Interesting Movie Plot? PLZ. READ! Easy points!?!
Question: Interesting Movie Plot!? PLZ!. READ! Easy points!!?
Do you think this is a good plot!?
Here is the cast:
-Sam (Danny's love interest, Roy's sister)
-Danny (Sam's love interest)
-Johnny (Sam's best friend, agent in training)
-Roy ( Sam's brother)
When Pheonix, Arizona Police can't catch a serial killer!. They request the help of a federal agency!. Since they have a lack of agents avalible, they enlist a agent in training (Johnny)!. And Roy forces his way onto the case by begging!. But here's the twist, the Roy IS the serial killer!. While they are on the case, Roy tries to get Sam and Danny (leaders of the group) to drop the case!. Sam refuses, so Roy takes action!. He hires people to help him out, and scare them out of the case!. Sam and Johnny are attcked on numerous occasions!. (He doesn't bother with Danny, because he's too good of an agent!.) Eventually Roy take sit into his own hands, and decides to kill Sam, but Sam ends up killing him instead!.
also, during the beginning, Danny flirts with Sam, and she shows no interest in him, but as the story progresses, and Danny shows that he really cares about her, she begins to fall in love and by the end of the story they fall in love!.
I’m working on getting a patent, but I wanted to see if people thought it was a good idea first!.
All comments are welcome!. Any suggestions or ideas are welcome too!. also, if you think that something is stupid, or doesn’t work in my story, then those comments are welcome too!.
Thanks in Advance!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Here is the cast:
-Sam (Danny's love interest, Roy's sister)
-Danny (Sam's love interest)
-Johnny (Sam's best friend, agent in training)
-Roy ( Sam's brother)
When Pheonix, Arizona Police can't catch a serial killer!. They request the help of a federal agency!. Since they have a lack of agents avalible, they enlist a agent in training (Johnny)!. And Roy forces his way onto the case by begging!. But here's the twist, the Roy IS the serial killer!. While they are on the case, Roy tries to get Sam and Danny (leaders of the group) to drop the case!. Sam refuses, so Roy takes action!. He hires people to help him out, and scare them out of the case!. Sam and Johnny are attcked on numerous occasions!. (He doesn't bother with Danny, because he's too good of an agent!.) Eventually Roy take sit into his own hands, and decides to kill Sam, but Sam ends up killing him instead!.
also, during the beginning, Danny flirts with Sam, and she shows no interest in him, but as the story progresses, and Danny shows that he really cares about her, she begins to fall in love and by the end of the story they fall in love!.
I’m working on getting a patent, but I wanted to see if people thought it was a good idea first!.
All comments are welcome!. Any suggestions or ideas are welcome too!. also, if you think that something is stupid, or doesn’t work in my story, then those comments are welcome too!.
Thanks in Advance!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Yeah it's good, I would watch that!.!.!.just get a good cast!Www@Enter-QA@Com
You'd have some trouble getting past the 'suspension of disbelief' for certain aspects of the plot!. Johnny is being trained as a federal agent, yet cannot hold his own as well as Danny, who I am assuming is on the State Police force!?
I would also recommend shortening "Johnny" to simply "John" - especially if you're having him in the role of a federal agent!.
When the FBI helps with a case, they don't simply send the newbie into a serial killer investigation!. They would bring over a seasoned veteran who likely has experience with similar crimes!. That agent *may* be breaking in a new partner, however; but it's very unlikely that the rookie would be the sole representative of the Bureau in such a high-stakes case!.
I think you have some research to do on the 'law enforcement' angle, but overall this sounds like an enjoyable thriller!. I would watch it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I would also recommend shortening "Johnny" to simply "John" - especially if you're having him in the role of a federal agent!.
When the FBI helps with a case, they don't simply send the newbie into a serial killer investigation!. They would bring over a seasoned veteran who likely has experience with similar crimes!. That agent *may* be breaking in a new partner, however; but it's very unlikely that the rookie would be the sole representative of the Bureau in such a high-stakes case!.
I think you have some research to do on the 'law enforcement' angle, but overall this sounds like an enjoyable thriller!. I would watch it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Well, one thing that is inaccurate is the fact that ANY federal agency has a "lack of agents available"!. You could just make it so the agency (most likely FBI) puts Johnny on the case, kind of like what happened with Clarise Starling on the Silence of the Lambs!. also, I highly doubt that they would let an agent in training's brother on a federal investigation by begging!.!.!. Make the brother part of the agency too, or make him part of the Arizona Police!. also, I don't know what group Sam and Danny are involved with!. Are they the serial killers!? And why would Roy want to be on the case, and then want it dropped!? Thats a little too suspicious and unrealistic!.
Other than that, it seems like a decent plot!. It just needs more details and development!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Other than that, it seems like a decent plot!. It just needs more details and development!.Www@Enter-QA@Com