How can i improve my Ghost story?!
Question: How can i improve my Ghost story!?
THE GRAVEYARD BET
“!.!.!.!.!.!.ages ago an old man was buried in the grave down the road, had actually been buried alive”, I said!. “If you tried to go near his grave you can hear him scratching at the lid of his coffin”, I bluffed them because this is how I earn money and attract visitors to my village!.
A cherry fire was burning in the grate, forming weird shadows on creepy old wall!. I and a foreign couple were sitting inside an old hut, roofed by straw and hay!. The room smell like a dead rat!. There was no other house nearby!. The couple were sitting together cuddling inside their blanket as they listened to my ghost story!. The girl had long, golden-brown, silky, hair and blue dazzling eyes!. She was about 20!. The boy had short hair, muscular body, he looked brave and fearless!. He wore a black leather jacket with silver colour button!.
Suddenly, the clouds obscured the bright moon light, and the whole area surrounding was filled with a sense of anger and malice!. The tall trees were standing lifeless in the mist like huge, monstrous and towering skeletons waiting for us outside!. One by one the rain droplets begun to lunch from the clouds and attacked the pitiable old hut!. Little droplets of water were bleeding through its roof!.
“Whoever visits the graveyard at night, around this time, they will never return back”, I said!. I could see the girl’s watering eyes peeking from behind her blanket but her husband was not terrified!. “It sounds interesting tell me more about it”, asked the boy curiously!. “Even today people say they see a gloomy white figure of a man wandering around the grave”, I said!. The man looked even more curious, “I want to see it with my eyes, I think I have to go there tonight”, he said!.
As he said that I was worried!. I thought he will know the truth that I had lied them!. So, I tried to stop him from going there, “No, no it is dangerous for you, you might never return back”, I said!. “Don’t be afraid my friend i will be fine there is nothing like ghost and even if it is there, waiting for me, I would like to meet it”, he said!.
“No darling please don’t go there, it sounds like danger and I will be alone here”, Said the girl to her husband in a frightened voice!. She stopped him from going there, at the grave yard!. I was relieved!. I thought he would know the truth!. That night I slept proudly because another person had been trapped in my trap like a fly trapped in spider wave!.
But next morning the man was not in the hut!. We thought he had gone down to the village to see the beautiful scenery!. We waited him for long time but h didn’t return!. We started to search for him we looked everywhere but didn’t found him!. I was looking outside through a small window of the hut!. I saw crowd of people near the graveyard down the road!. I and the girl hurried down the road to see what had happened!.
“Harry!.!.!.!.!.!.eee!.!.!.!.!.!.!.” the girl cried!. Tears started to roll down her beautiful eyes as she saw her husband lying dead in the grave yard!. I myself was also shocked!. There was no sign of blood near his body!. I asked the man beside me!. The man explained, “Last night at around 12 o’clock I was passing down the grave yard I saw him there, in the graveyard, searching for something!. He looked scared!. So, I went and caught him from back but!.!.!.!.!.”
“But!.!.!.but what!?” I asked!. The man added, “He thought that the old man ghost had reached him from behind and caught him!. He died of fright!.!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
“!.!.!.!.!.!.ages ago an old man was buried in the grave down the road, had actually been buried alive”, I said!. “If you tried to go near his grave you can hear him scratching at the lid of his coffin”, I bluffed them because this is how I earn money and attract visitors to my village!.
A cherry fire was burning in the grate, forming weird shadows on creepy old wall!. I and a foreign couple were sitting inside an old hut, roofed by straw and hay!. The room smell like a dead rat!. There was no other house nearby!. The couple were sitting together cuddling inside their blanket as they listened to my ghost story!. The girl had long, golden-brown, silky, hair and blue dazzling eyes!. She was about 20!. The boy had short hair, muscular body, he looked brave and fearless!. He wore a black leather jacket with silver colour button!.
Suddenly, the clouds obscured the bright moon light, and the whole area surrounding was filled with a sense of anger and malice!. The tall trees were standing lifeless in the mist like huge, monstrous and towering skeletons waiting for us outside!. One by one the rain droplets begun to lunch from the clouds and attacked the pitiable old hut!. Little droplets of water were bleeding through its roof!.
“Whoever visits the graveyard at night, around this time, they will never return back”, I said!. I could see the girl’s watering eyes peeking from behind her blanket but her husband was not terrified!. “It sounds interesting tell me more about it”, asked the boy curiously!. “Even today people say they see a gloomy white figure of a man wandering around the grave”, I said!. The man looked even more curious, “I want to see it with my eyes, I think I have to go there tonight”, he said!.
As he said that I was worried!. I thought he will know the truth that I had lied them!. So, I tried to stop him from going there, “No, no it is dangerous for you, you might never return back”, I said!. “Don’t be afraid my friend i will be fine there is nothing like ghost and even if it is there, waiting for me, I would like to meet it”, he said!.
“No darling please don’t go there, it sounds like danger and I will be alone here”, Said the girl to her husband in a frightened voice!. She stopped him from going there, at the grave yard!. I was relieved!. I thought he would know the truth!. That night I slept proudly because another person had been trapped in my trap like a fly trapped in spider wave!.
But next morning the man was not in the hut!. We thought he had gone down to the village to see the beautiful scenery!. We waited him for long time but h didn’t return!. We started to search for him we looked everywhere but didn’t found him!. I was looking outside through a small window of the hut!. I saw crowd of people near the graveyard down the road!. I and the girl hurried down the road to see what had happened!.
“Harry!.!.!.!.!.!.eee!.!.!.!.!.!.!.” the girl cried!. Tears started to roll down her beautiful eyes as she saw her husband lying dead in the grave yard!. I myself was also shocked!. There was no sign of blood near his body!. I asked the man beside me!. The man explained, “Last night at around 12 o’clock I was passing down the grave yard I saw him there, in the graveyard, searching for something!. He looked scared!. So, I went and caught him from back but!.!.!.!.!.”
“But!.!.!.but what!?” I asked!. The man added, “He thought that the old man ghost had reached him from behind and caught him!. He died of fright!.!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Similar to one from The Twilight Zone where a gunslinger sticks a knife in his dead enemy's grave and finds his coat being grabbed and dies of fright!. Turns out he actually stabbed his knife through his jacket!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Make it scary!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
make it more advanture!.!.
and scary too!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
and scary too!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
no time to read it but thnks for the 2 pointsWww@Enter-QA@Com
Died of fright, eh!? Hmmmm!.!.!.!.!.
Well to tell the truth I was completely bored!. I agree with the first answer, it needs to be more scary!. If you went into detail about other people's deaths when they were at the graveyard it would be scary!. Like for example: Once, a man by the name of George was at the graveyard at night!. George waited for an hour but saw no ghost!. He was about to leave when the ghost appeared!. He started to walk to it when the ghost came rushing towards him!. George took off running toward the exit in fright!. He was almost there and when he turned around the ghost was gone!. He was releived but when he turned around the ghost was towering over him!.!.!.!.!.( you finish it)
(oh, and i think true ghost stories are way scarier than fictional ones)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Well to tell the truth I was completely bored!. I agree with the first answer, it needs to be more scary!. If you went into detail about other people's deaths when they were at the graveyard it would be scary!. Like for example: Once, a man by the name of George was at the graveyard at night!. George waited for an hour but saw no ghost!. He was about to leave when the ghost appeared!. He started to walk to it when the ghost came rushing towards him!. George took off running toward the exit in fright!. He was almost there and when he turned around the ghost was gone!. He was releived but when he turned around the ghost was towering over him!.!.!.!.!.( you finish it)
(oh, and i think true ghost stories are way scarier than fictional ones)Www@Enter-QA@Com