Is my writing good?!
Question: Is my writing good!?
To say he woke up would be of flaw!. He, more like was born; Or at least thats what it seemed to him thougth his eyes!. Yet he is not naive as a child!.
He found him self laying on his back in a forest!. The young man looked at his clothes to see that he was wearing a large shirt that went to cover his hip!. His shirt and pants were stained with who knows what!? He stood up retarded by his efforts to remember!. In a atemp to recall lost past, or maybe by survival instict he surveyed the sourndings!.
The forest was still!.The area was buetiful, but there was a foreshadow of demonic evil in the air!. The forest had only small pockets of light puncturing the canopy, the rest of the forest was the color that would be casted if it was about to rain!. The young man stumbled over a fallen branch!. What ever was watching on the limb of the tree must have found the tall figure with red hair apealing!. With a leap, it was on the ground!. Tim, which the young man had just found out was his name in this unconvennal time, spun around and ran like hell!. He did'nt need to look back to see if the dark silhouette was behind him, because he could feel its presense because it was as a cold breath down his spine!. His mind lost the impression of the forest and was set on running as fast as possible!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
He found him self laying on his back in a forest!. The young man looked at his clothes to see that he was wearing a large shirt that went to cover his hip!. His shirt and pants were stained with who knows what!? He stood up retarded by his efforts to remember!. In a atemp to recall lost past, or maybe by survival instict he surveyed the sourndings!.
The forest was still!.The area was buetiful, but there was a foreshadow of demonic evil in the air!. The forest had only small pockets of light puncturing the canopy, the rest of the forest was the color that would be casted if it was about to rain!. The young man stumbled over a fallen branch!. What ever was watching on the limb of the tree must have found the tall figure with red hair apealing!. With a leap, it was on the ground!. Tim, which the young man had just found out was his name in this unconvennal time, spun around and ran like hell!. He did'nt need to look back to see if the dark silhouette was behind him, because he could feel its presense because it was as a cold breath down his spine!. His mind lost the impression of the forest and was set on running as fast as possible!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
It's interesting and descriptive but I have to agree with Nate!. It could use some work, keep working on it and you'll get it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Sorry, not a mutch reader :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
to much to read sorry!. shortin itWww@Enter-QA@Com
it loox kinda looooooong
srry but im not going to read it
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srry but im not going to read it
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yes u are i like all the adjectives!. i cant wait to read the book lolWww@Enter-QA@Com
so many adjectives!.!.!.!. thats fine for an essay, but anything longer then a page and it just gets old and i absolutely hate it and am forced to put the writting peice down!. You are ok!. seen alot better, and alot worse!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I'M SORRY, YOU DO WRITE WELL, HOWEVER THERE ARE WAYYY TOO MANY WORDS SPELLED WRONG!. IF YOU CAN WRITE THAT WELL, HOW CAN YOU SPELL SO MANY WORDS WRONG!? PEOPLE READING THIS MIGHT NOT GET THE POINT ALL THE TIME DUE TO THE MISSPELLING AND MISUSE OF PUNCTUATION!. THE STORY DID KEEP ME WANTING TO READ MORE HOWEVER!.
1 MORE THING: HOW CAN YOU SAY NO LONG ANSWERS WHEN YOUR "QUESTION" IS A WHOLE BOOK LONG!?!?!?!?!? HMMMMMMMWww@Enter-QA@Com
1 MORE THING: HOW CAN YOU SAY NO LONG ANSWERS WHEN YOUR "QUESTION" IS A WHOLE BOOK LONG!?!?!?!?!? HMMMMMMMWww@Enter-QA@Com
Ok, my "professional critique" is this!. The spelling errors do matter and you need to remember that every good writer must write well!. Too many spelling errors and your readers won't understand the context!. Not 'till the end did I happen to know his name as you "mistakingly" blurted it out!. The last 2-3 sentences were the most structured and interesting!. Too many "maybes" and "likes" used!. If something is something, then just say this or that
Example:
In a atemp to recall lost past, or maybe by survival instict he surveyed the sourndings!.
Either he has instinct or he doesn't!. If the writer (you) is unsure of how his/her character feels or thinks, what are the odds that I will know!?
Positive input:
Your story is very interesting, but the details are scattered and not well thought out, like you just typed it up and ran with it, with no rought draft!. If you want a better critique of your work - check out the writting section in yahoo answers, don't ever stop writing!. Practice makes perfect!. Good luck :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Example:
In a atemp to recall lost past, or maybe by survival instict he surveyed the sourndings!.
Either he has instinct or he doesn't!. If the writer (you) is unsure of how his/her character feels or thinks, what are the odds that I will know!?
Positive input:
Your story is very interesting, but the details are scattered and not well thought out, like you just typed it up and ran with it, with no rought draft!. If you want a better critique of your work - check out the writting section in yahoo answers, don't ever stop writing!. Practice makes perfect!. Good luck :)Www@Enter-QA@Com