Good poem or no?!
Question: once lived a boy all he wanted was a platic red toy oh boy oh boy he said out loud earn enough moeny and dad will be proud skipping to his loo he passed out in liquor and booze a drunk by day killer by night the dead guy lay to his right if this makes sense he said to himself then sht im an elf what to do is the question he asked lit up his house with a nice lit match
Answers: once lived a boy all he wanted was a platic red toy oh boy oh boy he said out loud earn enough moeny and dad will be proud skipping to his loo he passed out in liquor and booze a drunk by day killer by night the dead guy lay to his right if this makes sense he said to himself then sht im an elf what to do is the question he asked lit up his house with a nice lit match
thats really good! ur talented! good job!
Needs to be sectioned out so i can better locate the rhyme scheme and the first part is good but the latter part just doesn't connect at all with the former scenario. Clarify and partially rewrite and i'm sure it will be great :)
Are you smoking something?
are u on pot ?
what the hell!!!!!!!