Feedback (advice)?!
Question: I need feedback o this poem, please?
The night I met you
my life turned around.
I ran up the door
went through the steps.
I layed on the t.v
and watched my bed.
Got water from the microwave
then warmed up spaghetti in the sink.
I got into the phone
and picked up my bed.
Then I dialed Zach's number
and said Scotts name.
Answers: I need feedback o this poem, please?
The night I met you
my life turned around.
I ran up the door
went through the steps.
I layed on the t.v
and watched my bed.
Got water from the microwave
then warmed up spaghetti in the sink.
I got into the phone
and picked up my bed.
Then I dialed Zach's number
and said Scotts name.
I. LOVE. IT. the backwards thing is really clear and really cool. I think it could be a little longer with a little better ending, but i really do love it. Those are just suggestion bu i dont think you NEED to change anything. I really love it --- its beautifully funny.
Umm , I don't exactly get - wait , wait , hahaha haha . Nice poem .
That's awesome! So funny the way you switched everything around! You wrote that? Wow!
I closed the stairs,
Ran up the door,
Turn off my bed,
And hopped into my light,
All because you kissed me goodnight