What do you thing?!


Question: What do you thing!?
I wrote this poem/song everyone in my family says its really good when I read it to them but I want to know if it really is by someone not in my family!. So IF you can be nice about your answer and not hateful with the truth, I would greatly appreciate it

Hearts of gold
Swords of steal
Bravely they march onward
To a land, to their fate!.
Bravely are the worriers
Lips in song, battle cries!.
Bravely they march onward!.
Sword in hand, raise them high!.
A worrier’s cry for honor!.Www@Enter-QA@Com


Answers:
Yes it is good! It's really beautiful!.

There is one part that I find a little confusing!. The line, "Lips in song, battle cries," could be edited into a number of things that may make the meaning of that line more clear!.

And a spelling mistake(:
warrior*

But that is a beautiful poem, truthfully!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

It's not bad!.!.!. I am a huge critic!. Maybe a few changes could make it great!. I would be more metaphoric and about something happening currently, or something observed in a different manor!. I tried not to be hateful, but I can't help being honest!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

thing = think
steal = steel
worrier = warriorWww@Enter-QA@Com



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