Is this scary enough???!
Question:
Is this scary enough???
I am writing a horror book.Is this scary enough?
All of the sudden,from a dark corner,they heard a noise.Shick shick.Shick shick.
"What is that?"Carmen asked Camille.
"I don`t know,be quiet and see if we hear it again,"Camille ordered.They heard it again,this time louder.It got louder and louder each time.Finially,Camille got up and turned on the light.Nothing was there.She looked over at Carmen.She was pale white,her lips purple,staring at the spot the noise come from.Camille run over to her.
"Ca-Carmen?"she asked.It was cold on her side of the room,deathly cold.Carmen`s pupils in her eyes were big,even though the bright light clearly shone on them.They began to take-up her whole eye!
"S-stop.Stop!STOP!"Camille screamed.All of the sudden the color came back to Carmen`s body,and her eyes turned the shade of green that they had always been.
"What a dream I had.It seemed so real!"she exclaimed.
"Yeah,too real,"Camille replied.What had happened there was ghostly.
Answers: ***IT'S NOT BAD, BUT IT NEEDS WORK. JUST USE YOUR IMAGINATION,A ND BE MORE DESCRIPTIVE. GOOD LUCK ON THE BOOK.*** no, its just weird...and your talent might be a little lacking. your not a professional right? no... sorry it was stupid... and never really "scarry" just supenceful
best of luck
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