Can you HELP ME editing my poem ?!
Question:
Can you HELP ME editing my poem ?
i already sent my poem to poetry.com but they refused to publish it .. i got really upset .. please help me to edit it ... and rate it for me
Brother
I can feel your blood
Flowing in my heart,
I can hear your breath
Moving in my lung,
I can see your tears
Running down my face,
My life without you
Is an empty place,
Because your land is my land,
Because your blood is my blood,
And your soul is my soul,
Cause we all are one hand,
When you cry
I feel your pain,
When you are wounded
I bleed again,
When you feel happy
I fly high,
When you succeed
I can touch the sky.
Answers:
I liked it, but I don't feel comfortable editing it without knowing what you think needs to be edited