Rate my anime story (Sakura Neko part 1 Chapter 2)!
Question: Rate my anime story (Sakura Neko part 1 Chapter 2)
Naomi had been pretty upset that night,she really wanted to see Kaito again!.!.!.'Why couldnt he just stay,even for 1 more minute!.!.!.'Thought Naomi!.'He was so cute!.!.!.his dark brown hair!.!.and deep blue eyes!.!.!.NO WHAT AM I THINKING!!?Im not in love!.!.im not!.!.'Naomi thought to herself just before falling asleep!.
~The next morning~
BEEP BEEP BEEP!!!
'no!.!.not morning!.!.ugh better get up!.!.'Naomi said to herself as she pressed the button on her alarm clock!. She sat up on her bed and rubbed her eyes until her vision was clear!. After she got dressed Naomi walked downstairs said goodbye to her Aunt and grabbed some breakfast!. "NAOMI!"Yumi yelled out as she ran over to Naomi at the bus stop!. "Good Morning Yumi-Chan!."Naomi replied with a childish grin!. "Hey!I told you no saying Chan,it bugs me!.Makes me sound like im all high and mighty!."Yumi said gigling!. The girls laughed and approched the bus as it stopped right in front of them!.
~Later at school~
"Ok,i'll see you in home room!."Naomi said to Yumi as she walked over to the drinking fountain!. When Naomi had finished the morning bell had rang!. 'oh no,im gonna be late!' Since no one else was in the hall except her Naomi had ran so she wasnt too late!.She looked back to make sure no was behind her (so she wouldnt get a lecture) and all of a sudden she ran into something,it seemed very firmiliar!.!.!.she looked over at what she had fallen on and realized!. "K!.!.Kaito!?!"Naomi said as she quickly jumped of of Kaito!.She felt her face turn red!."I!.!.Im!.!.!.s!.!.sorry!.!.i didnt!.!."Kaito stopped her!. "Its ok,really!."He said smiling at Naomi,it seemed he was almost glad she fell on him!."Good thing i caught you,you could've gotten hurt!."Kaito said giggling a little bit!. Naomi was speechless,there where so many questions,why was he here,how long is he staying and was he glad he saw her!?Naomi was very confussed!. "Do you know where room!.!.!.102 is!?"Kaito asked!. '102!?thats my homeroom!'Naomi thought to herself in excitment!. "Oh!Thats my homeroom,here follow me!."Naomi said leading Kaito to the room!. Kaito looked down at her arm!. "so your bruise is going away!?"He asked!. Naomi look down at her arm and said "Yeah,it doesnt hurt anymore!."She said smiling to herself!. There was a silence between them for a few minutes,Kaito then reached out and held onto Naomi's hand!.Naomi felt her heart beat,it was like a drum pounding in her chest!. 'Kaito!.!.i missed you!.'Naomi thought, because she was to nervous to speak!. When they arrived at the room Kaito let go of her hand and they walked in!. The Sensei(Teacher) was just about to take audtendence!. "where have you two been!?"she asked in a sweet yet proper way!. "I!.!.!."Naomi started!. "I was Lost and Naomi helped me fnd my way here!."Kaito said trying not to get Naomi in trouble!. "hmm!.!.alright!."Said their Sensei!."Class we have a new student,please introduce yourself!."she said!. "I'm Domota Kaito!."Kaito said!. "Kaito!.!.take your seat,there is an empty desk over there!."She said as she pointed to a desk in a row a few desks away from Naomi!.
From behind Naomi Yumi poked her until she turned around!. "so,you happy Kaito is here!?"Yumi said in a 'i told you so' kinda way!. "hmmm!.!.!.maybe"Naomi Said Grinning!. Yumi stuck her tounge out!.
'If only you knew how happy i was Yumi'
~To be continued in part 2 of chapter 2 Sakura Neko!~
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~The next morning~
BEEP BEEP BEEP!!!
'no!.!.not morning!.!.ugh better get up!.!.'Naomi said to herself as she pressed the button on her alarm clock!. She sat up on her bed and rubbed her eyes until her vision was clear!. After she got dressed Naomi walked downstairs said goodbye to her Aunt and grabbed some breakfast!. "NAOMI!"Yumi yelled out as she ran over to Naomi at the bus stop!. "Good Morning Yumi-Chan!."Naomi replied with a childish grin!. "Hey!I told you no saying Chan,it bugs me!.Makes me sound like im all high and mighty!."Yumi said gigling!. The girls laughed and approched the bus as it stopped right in front of them!.
~Later at school~
"Ok,i'll see you in home room!."Naomi said to Yumi as she walked over to the drinking fountain!. When Naomi had finished the morning bell had rang!. 'oh no,im gonna be late!' Since no one else was in the hall except her Naomi had ran so she wasnt too late!.She looked back to make sure no was behind her (so she wouldnt get a lecture) and all of a sudden she ran into something,it seemed very firmiliar!.!.!.she looked over at what she had fallen on and realized!. "K!.!.Kaito!?!"Naomi said as she quickly jumped of of Kaito!.She felt her face turn red!."I!.!.Im!.!.!.s!.!.sorry!.!.i didnt!.!."Kaito stopped her!. "Its ok,really!."He said smiling at Naomi,it seemed he was almost glad she fell on him!."Good thing i caught you,you could've gotten hurt!."Kaito said giggling a little bit!. Naomi was speechless,there where so many questions,why was he here,how long is he staying and was he glad he saw her!?Naomi was very confussed!. "Do you know where room!.!.!.102 is!?"Kaito asked!. '102!?thats my homeroom!'Naomi thought to herself in excitment!. "Oh!Thats my homeroom,here follow me!."Naomi said leading Kaito to the room!. Kaito looked down at her arm!. "so your bruise is going away!?"He asked!. Naomi look down at her arm and said "Yeah,it doesnt hurt anymore!."She said smiling to herself!. There was a silence between them for a few minutes,Kaito then reached out and held onto Naomi's hand!.Naomi felt her heart beat,it was like a drum pounding in her chest!. 'Kaito!.!.i missed you!.'Naomi thought, because she was to nervous to speak!. When they arrived at the room Kaito let go of her hand and they walked in!. The Sensei(Teacher) was just about to take audtendence!. "where have you two been!?"she asked in a sweet yet proper way!. "I!.!.!."Naomi started!. "I was Lost and Naomi helped me fnd my way here!."Kaito said trying not to get Naomi in trouble!. "hmm!.!.alright!."Said their Sensei!."Class we have a new student,please introduce yourself!."she said!. "I'm Domota Kaito!."Kaito said!. "Kaito!.!.take your seat,there is an empty desk over there!."She said as she pointed to a desk in a row a few desks away from Naomi!.
From behind Naomi Yumi poked her until she turned around!. "so,you happy Kaito is here!?"Yumi said in a 'i told you so' kinda way!. "hmmm!.!.!.maybe"Naomi Said Grinning!. Yumi stuck her tounge out!.
'If only you knew how happy i was Yumi'
~To be continued in part 2 of chapter 2 Sakura Neko!~
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A 9!.5 on a 10 scale!. It's creative , well written, well thought out!. It's characters are interesting enough to make me want to read more!. I am curious as to how she got hurt !. also I'd like to know her age , hair color, eye color etc---!.as that would make this story even more interesting to read!. Shine on!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
it's okay!. the morning part is too plain!. Www@Enter-QA@Com