Rate my anime story (Sakura Neko part 4 chapter 1)!
Question: Rate my anime story (Sakura Neko part 4 chapter 1)
(i changed Naomis age so shes 14 in 9th grade)
Yumi walked over to Naomi and sat on her knees beside her!."He's cute!."Yumi said as they watched Kaito's car he had been in fade away!."You think so to!"Yumi said grinning at Naomi!. Naomi looked away,trying not to blush she changed the subject!."Hey can i borrow your SN Manga boo!.!." Naomi was about to finish before Yumi interrupted!. "Do you think you'll see him again!?"she asked!. "Dunno!."Naomi said staring at the bruise on her arm!. "!.!.!.Do you want to!?"Yumi asked!. "!.!.!.!.!.!."Naomi did want to see him again,but she knew Yumi wouldnt shut up about it so!.!.!."No!.!.!.it was just a once in a lifetime thing OK!" Naomi said trying not to cry!."!.!.!.well!.!.!.lets go play volley ball!."Yumi said trying to cheer her up!.
The two of them played volleyball and spent the last day of summer being retarded and having fun but Naomi was still sad that she wont see Kaito again!.!.!.
"The girl is in sight master!."
"Good,what about the charms!?"
"Yes!."
"Be sure she the charms are destroyed before their powers awaken!"
"Yes master!"
*Bak at teh beach*
"Wasn't that fun Naomi!!?"Yumi asked catching up to Naomi!. "Yeah!." Naomi said,who was more focused on getting home than talking!. "!.!.!.hey look your bruise is going away!." Yumi said trying to think of something to say!. "uh huh!.!.!.well i better get going,school tomarrow!."Naomi said!. Just before Naomi walked up to her aunts car Yumi gave her a hug and said!."Im sure you'll see him again,true love always finds a way!.!.!." Naomi nodded and gave Yumi a slight smile and sat down into the front seat of her Aunt's black(and shiny oooh shiny)sports car!.
'I sure hope your right Yumi!.!.!.!.'Naomi thought as they drove away into the sunset!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
~To be continued in Sakura Neko part 1 Chapter 4~
OK!thanks for reading hope u enjoyed and please rate on a scale 1-10!.
dont read this unless you read the other parts PLEASE! :]Www@Enter-QA@Com
Yumi walked over to Naomi and sat on her knees beside her!."He's cute!."Yumi said as they watched Kaito's car he had been in fade away!."You think so to!"Yumi said grinning at Naomi!. Naomi looked away,trying not to blush she changed the subject!."Hey can i borrow your SN Manga boo!.!." Naomi was about to finish before Yumi interrupted!. "Do you think you'll see him again!?"she asked!. "Dunno!."Naomi said staring at the bruise on her arm!. "!.!.!.Do you want to!?"Yumi asked!. "!.!.!.!.!.!."Naomi did want to see him again,but she knew Yumi wouldnt shut up about it so!.!.!."No!.!.!.it was just a once in a lifetime thing OK!" Naomi said trying not to cry!."!.!.!.well!.!.!.lets go play volley ball!."Yumi said trying to cheer her up!.
The two of them played volleyball and spent the last day of summer being retarded and having fun but Naomi was still sad that she wont see Kaito again!.!.!.
"The girl is in sight master!."
"Good,what about the charms!?"
"Yes!."
"Be sure she the charms are destroyed before their powers awaken!"
"Yes master!"
*Bak at teh beach*
"Wasn't that fun Naomi!!?"Yumi asked catching up to Naomi!. "Yeah!." Naomi said,who was more focused on getting home than talking!. "!.!.!.hey look your bruise is going away!." Yumi said trying to think of something to say!. "uh huh!.!.!.well i better get going,school tomarrow!."Naomi said!. Just before Naomi walked up to her aunts car Yumi gave her a hug and said!."Im sure you'll see him again,true love always finds a way!.!.!." Naomi nodded and gave Yumi a slight smile and sat down into the front seat of her Aunt's black(and shiny oooh shiny)sports car!.
'I sure hope your right Yumi!.!.!.!.'Naomi thought as they drove away into the sunset!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
~To be continued in Sakura Neko part 1 Chapter 4~
OK!thanks for reading hope u enjoyed and please rate on a scale 1-10!.
dont read this unless you read the other parts PLEASE! :]Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
This is excellent, making her 14 and implying that Kaito is at least 16 (he has a car) draws in a wider audiance!. I am looking forwrd to reading many more chapters!. That bruise is mysterious since I missed your first chapter(s) I don't know where it came from but it sounds like Kaito is involved as well as Yumi!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
where'd she get the bruise from!? Other than that its good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com