Character rating once more...?!
Question: Masato.
A cruel ruling lord of a large kingdom, and his rule is moving out more everyday. He doesn't care who gets in his way, he will kill anyone. Women and kids even. He has a powerful list of minions that are controlled by a spell.
The spell is the Chain of Life. Masato marks you in some way or another. Such as making you have a scar on your body, but making it so your no longer a virgin. Once the mark is on, a light blue chain is around your neck, even in death. If you don;t follow Masato's orders, the chain sends pain through your body.
Masato has a thing for innocent cute boys, which is the reason he has the adorable mage Mizuki as his right hand man. Sadly, Mizuki hates Masato with every fiber of his being.
Answers: Masato.
A cruel ruling lord of a large kingdom, and his rule is moving out more everyday. He doesn't care who gets in his way, he will kill anyone. Women and kids even. He has a powerful list of minions that are controlled by a spell.
The spell is the Chain of Life. Masato marks you in some way or another. Such as making you have a scar on your body, but making it so your no longer a virgin. Once the mark is on, a light blue chain is around your neck, even in death. If you don;t follow Masato's orders, the chain sends pain through your body.
Masato has a thing for innocent cute boys, which is the reason he has the adorable mage Mizuki as his right hand man. Sadly, Mizuki hates Masato with every fiber of his being.
hee hee hee... lol! =]
"but making it so your no longer a virgin..." i think this is EXTREMELY interesting. but like... how?
and i also thinks is interesting how hes a rutheless killer/ruler yet has a thing for little boys... pedophile... lol! but yea, i think thats cool. i can see him tormenting mizuki with his "assaults"... lol!
(does he assault him in a perverted/funny way or a dead serious "i will make you mine" kinda way?)
so, mizuki is his right hand man? does mizuki somehow escape from masato to travel with bell and the others?
sorry... i kinda got all into it... just the characters!! lol =]
um... just to say, im not really feeling the name "masato". it doesnt ring when i think about his characrter. masato is suited more for a character like mizuki... in my opinion.
edit: ah!! sorry ^^" i didnt mean to get you angry or anything about the name. it just doesnt sound eveil to me. srry.
ok. so thats it.... yeah... like the ultimate evil seme... lol. is he a beautiful character? like physically? or is he more of a "general" type villain? srry for asking so many questions ^^"
edit: ah, i see. the mark thing. ok. yea... thats cool. so it doesnt have to be this whole ritual thing or anything. that makes it much more simpler.
(just to say... i think it would look sexy if he like bit them or did some sort of "hicky" on their chest which left a certain mark. ah... im a yaoi girl all the way. just got some sexy images of how i think mizuki to be moaning....@/////@ )
I think it sounds good. I'm not sure about the virgin part...I think that'd be a little weird, and the blue chain....is that visible? couldnt there be some way to get it off?
Okay I get the chain of life now. So does Masato flirt with Mizuki or does he always keep things serious? I think if he flirted with him and kept getting regected that would make things kinda funny and not so serious all the time.
very VERY nice. i love how Masato is kind of a perv.... hee hee hee... i love pervs... the chain idea is cool too... you just have to make sure that the scars are cool and unique to each person.
also, i like the bit about Mizuki, but he shouldn't be the right hand man. maybe he could seem to be, but really be completely controlled by Masato; that could cause some pretty rape scenes...
the chain should not be visible regularly, but there should be a way to make it appear, and the good guys should know how. some of the bad people should be taken hostage at one point too... but definitely one of the more innocent ones.
since Masato is a bad guy apparently, you should include some more about the good people and their attitudes towards Masato's followers.
the virgin thing is cool too, but you need to go into a bit more detail with it; just take the thought a little further.
once again, you are doing great. just keep developing the story!